First post.....critique is encouraged

[AD319]

Let me know what you think of this please folks, one of my first attempts with designer

[justwilliam]

This composition has all of the signs of casual street photography. The partially ‘out-of-frame’ elements add to this sense of animation. 

 

The young boy and the gumball machines compete for the eye’s attention - in a good way. Once temporarily free from the pull of those two strong elements, the eye is allowed leave to visit other areas of detail such as inside through the store window, the newspaper bag, the bottles in their crates, and signage. They then quickly return to the main elements before beginning another journey within the frame.

The fact that the other person in the scene and a portion of one gumball machine lie partially out-of-frame help to keep the viewer from leaving the image. One is nudged into having yet another look around. The colours are fitting as is the scale.

 

All in all a likeable slice of everyday life.    :)

 

The photo elements in juxtaposition to the vector work do not work so well together; rather it can be a distraction which takes the viewer out of the scene and reminds them that it is not ‘real’. The blur on the canned goods seen through the shop window is somewhat excessive and adds nothing to the image. Shadow and light alone could have provided a better sense of depth. And the scene has an slightly ’empty’ feel as, although both gumball machines are full, the shelves themselves could have likewise been fuller giving your viewers even more to discover and enjoy. The splendid reflections provided the to the glass on the two machines could also have been applied to the windows which would further amplify any feeling of depth and fullness in the scene.

 

This illustration has all of the signs of an excellent beginning of a wonderful little street corner vignette that is crying out for completion. There is nothing wrong with it at all; just the opposite, but it could be so much better given a bit more time and effort. But what is there is delightful!  I look forward to seeing more of your art.

[peter]

Eh, Lad! Arkwight would bbbbbbb be..ppppproud of it.

 

Love the Corona 10p deposit bottle poster. Where's them prices in that window? Granville!!! Go get your pppppaint ttttt...brush!

 

For a first attempt, wow!